All Comments on 'FireBlood Ch. 02'

Please continue the story. I look forward to the next installment.

i love the story...it is so imaginative ok a little predictable...but i love it. waiting for the 4th part

The biggest drawback here, by a longshot, is that you aren't a very good writer. Mispellings, grammar issues, run on sentences out the ass. Its very frustrating to read. And then you just tack things on weirdly. "She didn't see the lotus flower birthmark on the back of her neck or the petal that fell from it..." First, that's bizarre. Second, how does a 20 year old not know about a birthmark on the back of her neck? That's not exactly hidden. Finally, as usual, that was a run on sentence.

I will read on solely in the hopes that you found an editor. We'll see.

Also illustrations. Put them after you introduce the character, so they supplement our mental image. When you do it before we're like who the hell is that?