All Comments on 'First Date Car Fun'

Good premise.

But, once sex started, it was too rushed. And lacked dialog/verbal interplay.

No asking if what was being done by one to the other was what he/she liked.

No extended playing with his cock and balls before moving on.

And you really need an editor, too many grammar issues.

Could have been five stars. Wasn't.

Fabulous tale; looking forward to much more 😀

Good first story, a lot of fun to read. But I have to agree with a pervious comment about there should've been more dialogue. It helps connect the reader to the characters and can make the story more exciting.

I enjoyed it. As a memory, rather than a story, the lack of dialogue is understandable but, if you are not happy with writing dialogue, anyway, then just don't do it - find your own voice and say what you want to say in your own way.