All Comments on 'First Date Ch. 02'

i liked it, but if you are going to write more stories, you must either get someone to edit them before publishing, or learn a lot more English grammar than you now know. Especially the use of masculine and feminine pronouns. His, vs. hers. He vs. she. Him vs. her. He vs. she., etc. I had to read many parts over and over to understand who was doing what to whom.

It's an enjoyable story. The writing in pov style is a bit odd. And his/her are used mostly inverted. His is male, her is female. At first it confused me, then I realised it and could adapt to it. Still, try to correct it in the future.