All Comments on 'First Day Back'

WOW! Your pacing in the first half of this story was lyrical, beautiful, and almost musical. You have a rare talent that invokes the heart instead of the head. Which is why your pacing in the latter half confused me. It accelerated. Why?

Something important was lost.

"Aside for some a few loose ends he was happy with their progress."

Testing how many errors you can compress into one short phrase..?

Not bad, the writing, though.