All Comments on 'First Discovery Ch. 04'

More, please! :)

please hurry up with th next installment and make it longer! i love it!

Now it's getting good. Please quickly continue.

Finally, we're getting to the good stuff! I've been waiting for this. Keep it up! Hope the next chapter comes soon.

whoa hoo ! finally getting into the good , love story and the bulid up .. can't wait for more ..

Nice build up. Great characters. Pacing is wonderful. Please continue. Thanks

"Was it Janidy?!" Shaun asked. Lindsey is soccer friend of mine.

PLEASE, hold off on submitting any more chapters until you get in touch with one of Lit's volunteer editors. As I have noted previously, there's a good story in here, but you're killing it with your grammar, your spelling, your punctuation and sometimes your dialogue.

Three stars, but I'd much rather have given it five.

Please continue. loving plot line. longer would be good

Omg!!!! I love this story please don't make me wait as long for the next chapter. This is soo good.

MORE MORE MORE.

more plz..i check everyday for ur next entry..

hope to read the continuation of the article...looking forward to read it pretty soon...

It's been a while since we got Chapter 4 so what happens next in Chapter 5?

Great build up. Please continue this and your other new story line!

This is quite a fun and enjoyable story and and could have been worthy of five stars. However, I'm afraid I cut this down to three stars because throughout your spelling and grammar left one hell of a lot to be desired. You have the potential to be a good storyteller, so don't ruin it. Take the trouble to get your grammar and spelling right and you could well get those five stars.

Read all four of your chapters and enjoyed them all. Like it has been said your spell check and grammar need work but that will come with time. Loved your way of not being over descriptive on some things like others tend to do. Keep up the writing. Will look for more, Thanks

These stories are brilliantly written I hope there are more to come because Taty13 you are fantastic writer are you a writer of novels if not you should be honey. I enjoyed reading all 4 stories wonderful Taty13 cannot wait for more stories thank you for these stories. xx