All Comments on 'First Night with Don & Kate'

There were so many errors in the first few paragraphs, I couldn't stand to read further. It's not that your story may not be good; it's impossible to read! One star!

It is hard to pick them out when you rewrite and edit your own work. I encourage comments both positive and negative. I want to improve as I submit future stories. What would turn you on?

I'm sorry, but I too stopped after the first paragraph. I was looking for an MMF story, but major spelling errors always put me off. This is still the written word - even in the age of the interwebs. One learns the difference between 'there' and 'their' in primary school. If you can't spell, you can't write.

I liked your story a lot and look forward to more of your stories. How about having Tim eat Kate while Don is screwing her and then Tim enjoys her cream pie.

a lot.

Ya the wording at times was off but, all in all I very much liked the whole story.. Part 2 would be great.

tremendous buildup, well written and detailed. more please.

It ruins a good story to have so many errors in it - spelling, grammar, conflicting facts, etc. I suggest you get another author or user to give you some help on that. Otherwise, it's a good story. Keep writing!