All Comments on 'First Public Orgasm'

Enjoyed the start, looking forward to reading more

Please get an editor. Two glaring errors in the first paragraph.

HOT!! Young submissive beauty serving a mature Master. I want one!!

Rotten spelling

mmmmmmm id love to be in her shoes and have been in past but alas ong time ago now Id love for you to write about me sometime so hubby could read imagine etc etc Im Alyson sub bi UK wife a young 64 blonde live durham keen to be black owned controlled !!! subkinkyaly@gmail.com

Great story. I look forwrd to more.

Very erotic but a great many typos and errors.

Beautiful story, Collen. Your submissive behavior is very erotic. Keep the stories coming.

Too many typos and confused tense for me to finish. Why such disrespect to your readers? Use a volunteer editor.

Lucky girl

I enjoyed this story very much and can’t wait for the next one.

I liked it - but please pay some attention to spelling, typos and tenses. Spellcheck is free and easy to use, and avoids the reader thinking you are careless about what you write.

Needs proof reading. Many errors causing ambiguity.

Thank you all for your comments - I am glad that most of you seemed to have enjoyed my first story but it is a learning experience. I will take on board your comments about grammar, however the spelling confuses me as it was spell checked! I hope to hear more of your comments on future submissions.

Exceptional story, there’s an awful lot of promise here. Ok so there were some spelling/ grammatical errors but that sort of thing is easily solved. If you don’t have access to a proof reader/ editor try reading it aloud to yourself before submitting (no pun intended 😉)

Thanks for sharing Tess (uk)

I agree, more than a few correctable writing errors but the story is HOT HOT HOT. Much better to be able to write HOT stories, than be a perfect writer. Moving on to the next couple stories in your Library!! Great start!!!

Get a proofreader. I mean, really.