All Comments on 'First Story'

A nice sweet story.

Not bad for your first story.

If that is really true then you have been writing other items or in other venues. I am no expert but do a lot of reading and have no problem catching mispelling, bad language and etc rather easily. This story, in my opinion, was very well written.

Keep writing

Clearly exaggerated she came from you dabbing at her vagina with your tongue for a few seconds then riding on top for a couple more seconds.

Plus the inclusion of her having 36b breasts is just ridiculous. How would you know what size her breasts are.