All Comments on 'First Time in the Big City'

Your "story" is one big WELL written sex scene. But there is no story inside it, no plot.

Just add some plot and conflict!

Yes, it's one big erotic fantasy with just enough lead-in to make the situation clear. But why would I want more? It's impossible to believe an innocent country girl will accept so much sex all at once, and the story is drenched in incredible gushes of cum. But who cares? It's sensual, well written, and deliciously precise: "The next few shots landed squarely across Jen's tightly closed lips." Definitely aroused me.

I think my step daughter Jenny would really like this if only she would try it it with me and her sister.