All Comments on 'Firsts Ch. 05'

I've been waiting so long for this chaPter to come out and now there's going to be more -brilliant! just don't make us wait so long next time pleeeeeeeease

Just like Kes, I am in love with Gabriel too. *sighs* He sounds absolutely HOT and fuckable!

I so love your writing and have been checking continually for this story to be updated, i think this selection of stories is one of my favourites and would love to see it carried on with kez brothers!!!Hopefully we won't have to wait too long for the next installment!!

I loved it! I just hope we don't have to wait so long for the next chapter! :) Suspense is killing me.

Perfect! Your writing is realistic, hilarious, sexy and a whole bunch of other great things I don't have time to list. lol. Seriously can't wait to see what's in store for these two!

Loved the story. Don't keep us waiting for the next chapter.

well worth the wait...but PLEASE do not make us wait that long for the next chapter...im dying to find out the end!

Love it!! the long wait between chapters is killing me. This story has it all. Keep up the pen.

Great story. Really likable characters. It is funny to be reading about characters who appear to be in the U.S. (but maybe Canada?), with our cultural mix and vernacular, yet with British spelling! But no biggy. I love this story and hope you keep writing!

Unfortunately, the lack of a good proofread and correct grammar sometimes interferes with true appreciation of an excellent story.

de Jay

dlj13@bellsouth.net

2/5. That is all it deserve.

At this position I can say that what ever has been built up till this chapter went to trash.

You clearly depicted Gabe as a PLAYER and Kes as some horny teenager.

It isn't a crush because it doesn't justify the situation.

They are FRIENDS WITH BENEFITS, that is all I can say and the reason for my disappointment is you presented them as if they are nurturing a sacred love within.

Sorry but you literally wasted yourself at the edge trying to portray a sex-flick story.

-- JoKeR_JcK

When she said her heart would be 'braking', was that a reference to Gabriel working at an auto shop? LOL