All Comments on 'Foolish White Knight'

Nice tight story. Very enjoyable to read. Please share more! Thanks

I hope there are more chapters to come!

your tale was great as far as it went, no romance yet. finish the tale.

Whether this story is OK or great depends upon whether there are follow-up chapters.

Am looking forward to the remainder of this story!

I hope there will be a part two. This would be probably be a good novel.

More please !! this story has long legs,let it run.

A great start, but it really needs a continuation of this story. I can easily see this one as a multi-chapter story. The plot line is wide open and waiting.

Great Job and looking forward to the next chapter.

Well done...I await your further voyage of possibilities!

This is too short to be a stand-alone Romance. Generally, if a story is to be a multi-part there is a number in the title to indicate to the reader what they are getting into. It isn't official, but it is common. I would either make the story longer or add a number to the title.

It's an interesting start, but I can't even rate this. It's too short with no insight into either character. It's void of bad grammar and typos which is good, but if I were going to rate it, if give it a 2. Just because at this point...there is no point to this story.

Sometimes Lit. 'loses' part of a story.

Seen it happen to a story that was complete on another site.

Or did you leave off the Ch. 01 from the title?

But if this is all there is, then it is not enough.

There is no romance here, just a short story of a decent guy helping a woman.

Well, I sure hope there are many more pages to come! I love reading about damsels being saved, and their new lives. Maybe just maybe the knight needs a little saving too. I bet his past life left some scars that needed healing, and Elizabeth is just the Medicine he needs.

I sure hope there's more of this.

You write with style & assurance; you make it well-worth reading.

Thank you

HP

Great concept. This will make a great series ☺

Has great potential. There must be more because there's been no Romance yet! With such a short chapter I hope we don't have to wait long for the next installment.

Lovely intro. I am waiting patiently for more. Quite in love with the characters already.

Nice start great potential please bring more

I love slow starts which are written as well as this story and with strong characterisation. Already looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you.

needs a sequel!

It's not another stroke story! I'm sure you'll get a lot more positive comments. We're waiting for the next part.

I liked this a lot and thanks to the author for that. But, I agree with all the other comments about more parts. It's good as is, but the characters are great so there should be more of their story. Could do a simple second and final part or could easily get creative and create a much more rich, multi-chapter story.

interesting plot

makings of a fine series

but only if the Author follows his heart & own ideas

would be ruined twisting the story to fit readers feedback

and its hold-em and fold-em. TK U MLJ LV NV

Superb beginning, and I hope to see more. I echo the previous commenter who urged that, should you continue the series, you should follow your own inclinations and not attempt to pander to the readers.

If you need an editor for future chapters, please don't hesitate to call on me. :)

I hate to read a really good story or in this case introduction and then not have the rest of the story to read. I gave you 5 stars but if I had known you did not finish the story your score would have been much lower. Take the time to finish the story. With any imagination at all, and not like you next grey effort you could write a wonderful story.

Good Luck/Bon Chance

A charming beginning, but what happens now?? Does she divorce the Jerk, fall in love with Prince Charming, marry and live happily ever after, or what...?