by Pars001
This has turned into a stupid story. Characters are acting out of their normal behaviour.
Why would Johnathon choke his baby sister Trina? Where did that come from? Totally from nowhere.
I give up, I should have given up ages ago. It’s just so hard to read now. Sentences and whole paragraphs just make no sense.
Great job, great story line. Do you have an editor? If not, I am willing to help with that. Your writing style has greatly improved, just a bit of work is needed on your continuity. Keep up the good work!