All Comments on 'Forbidden Fruit Pt. 02'

Five stars. Nicely and naturally developed characters and delicately handled political commentary. Few writers do either well.

Great story 5 stars.

A couple of typos though.

Looking forward to #3

Great story, looking forward to seeing more chapters, and thank you.

Keep going,there has to be more to this

More more more!!!

i don't read from this section....... normally, butlooking through what stories you've done, I decided on this to read, MORE MORE MORE , the story needs 2 or 3 chapters (not short ones) to complete it.

Don't make us wait to long for part 3.

You need to continue this, would love to see where they all wind up, truly a unique love story

Personally I happiest with fem topping, but mutual topping like the previous chapter is a wonderful middle-ground.

Please continue this story.

An interesting and delightful story so far. Please continue it.

My only criticism is that you should spend some time rereading it and cleaning up typos.

Thanks for the kind words. I know about typos. Sorry about that. I've been trying to improve. The reviewing is one of those things you spend so much time doing it begins to drive you mad. But I shall keep trying. Thanks again.

Serious feels in this part. Crystal really feels bad about hurting her ex-wife doesn't she? The poor woman. She grew up in a different time, and unlike her daughter, seems to have gathered the courage to transition and live true to herself much later in life. Still, she has a lovely daughter and a cute lover now. Curious to see where this three-way relationship goes.

Shout out to this line - "They all claim this--that they have their finger on the pulse of the nation, but that finger is really up their ass, and they're totally going to smell it when they pull it out." That's fuckin hilarious.

Thank you for your interest and kind words. This was one of my more challenging stories. I need to get back to it. Glad you like that line. It's an expanded version of a line said by Jason Lee in Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back. Jason Lee was talking about Jay and Silent Bob not paying attention to the happenings in pop culture. I liked it as a way to describe certain people's assumed knowledge of the world. I added the smelling-part because that's human nature. I try not to go off on too many rants in the stories because they are supposed to be an escape from our world most of the time. Glad you like it though.