All Comments on 'Forever and Ever'

This could continue for another chapter to two.... :-)

Good story! More?

Looking forward to another!

Good story, but could have used a bit more background.

More please, hot story and love to read what happens from here on with these two.

A Little short should have built up a little background on the characters it helps bring everything together

I really hated to give this one a 3/5, but it just has too many flaws.

The first problem is the transition scene when Brent catches Flora fantasizing about him as she masturbates. It doesn't really flow smoothly from 'forgiving each other' into their first kiss. Brent moves from astonishment with his sister to kissing her without us being able to see his thoughts shift and adjust. Suddenly one becomes the other instantly.

The other problem that bothered me was even bigger:

"Brent.. I'm.. not on birth control. If you cum inside of me..." She gulped.

From the beginning of the story, the implications are that Flora has been living with her boyfriend Ryan because she seeks out Brent for a place to crash. If she were still living with their parents, why would she seek refuge from her brother? So if she's living with her boyfriend Ryan, why isn't she on birth control already? That's just straight up common sense. I honestly don't believe that Ryan and Flora are using condoms every day. Maybe a few people do, but the majority of couples who go so far as to cohabitate will generally seek out something more comfortable. 🤔

Those are the two biggest holes in the tale, but they are not the only issues. A little bit more world building was definitely needed.

Sooo she makes him cum by sucking his cock but he couldn't return the favor. Damn.