All Comments on 'Forever, Brandywine'

Very, very hot, and well-written! I am impressed that this is your first story, and I look forward to reading more from you. Thank you for sharing your talenta

Those boys were Google eyed, were they?

Nice little scenario but the writing and action is all rather clichéd and simple... Not really any character or plot, just girls with porno bodies.

Proofreading needed. Was Mandy going to the University of Washington or to “University at Washington State”which, by the way, doesn’t exist?

There really wasn’t much of a ‘story’ here, just a description of how the two met and had sex. There could have been more tension over a few weeks, more self doubt or more stress with the three brothers, for example.

Keep working on it. Good luck.

Nice work. Bring on chapter two please…