All Comments on 'Fragile Male Ego, in 750 Words'

Meh

What's good for the goose..........................Nicely done! 5 stars

Not a good 750 story. Needs the whole thing. 3*

Average. Way too many of these stories from you and everybody else.

I'd prefer to read how the wifey repairs the damage or tries to. Brenda could have cancelled her date after receiving her envelope, as you said. That would have been a more interesting story to me.

Well if a wife or husband goes on a "date" with someone then the other person is entitled to do the same thing. Why should amyone sit at home twiddling thier thumbs?

Love your 750 word stories! Keep them coming.

5

A nicely focused bit of ego jujitsu there. :) 5

But if she called off the date, why would he keep her? She made the date in the first place. In the imortal words of Porky, 'That's all, Folks.' D

This is his obligation, nay, his duty to go out with other women.

The population is roughly 50% male, meaning all those single men dating married women are depriving the single women of romance. Therefore when the wife starts to date again the husband must step up and date single women to maintain gender equality!

Did what you said you would in a pretty complete story. 4.3*

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ Good one.

More than 750, or, to be imprecise, more than ~750 would be a superfluity.

Nicely done.

Was worth a 4*.

5 Big Blazing Stars for a very interesting read. However, the commenters before me seem to think less of your great writing than I do. They must be literary professors from Yale or Harvard to be able to speak with so much authority. I liked a New take on a typical old Trope. thanks for your Effort. Buster2U

Nice short story! 4*

Creative story on a well trod path. Sometimes shorter is better.

Well done.

Not one novel idea in the story. Boring rather than fun.

Too many urban legends and tropes to be realistic even as it is unimaginative and boring.

Hell Ya! Your frail male ego soothed? thanks.

another little BTB stroker for boys pretending to be men

@lc69hunter - wtf?

Are you saying that there are not entitled girls out there who don't destroy their own marriages, expecting hubby to cave?

Dropping an insult on the audience isn't valid criticism.

Who's his layer? That was quick service. Excellent story. Turnabout is fair play. The Bear likes it. 5 stars, but too short. Yeah, I know, 750 words.

The BEAR

You know, not every one likes big fat tits.

The idea of a turnabout about "fragile female ego" is a good one, but 750 words was nowhere close to what is needed to have a decent story on the subject.

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We actually do get a lot of stories which could use the term "fragile female ego," but don't do so specifically. Really, just about any story in which the cheated on husband winds up with the stereotypical younger, prettier, hotter new woman, and in which the ex-wife complains bitterly about that could fit the "fragile female ego" profile, but it's never mentioned that way.

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The "fragile male ego" and "fragile female ego" both exist, but they are significantly different. On the male side, it's a combination of "I lost to him" and "how many other people know that I lost", while, with women, it's more generalized, less of a concern about having lost to a specific woman than a worry that no one will ever want her again. The injured "fractured male ego" can change jobs, move away, and get his life together again in a new city, get a fresh start where no one knows he was cuckolded, while the woman with the injured "fragile female ego" will always worry, no matter if she gets a fresh start somewhere else, that she'll always lose out in competition with other women.

JRandyJ wrote, "You know, not every one likes big fat tits."

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Raises hand! Give me a skinny girl with A or B boobs, tall and thin, skinny ass, long, thick hair, and bluer than blue eyes.

Ha, excellent! 5 stars. Amazing how much story you were able to put into 750 words. And I'd give you 6 stars, if I could, for calling out the fragile female ego.

Very nice. I always have a laugh at the "fragile male ego" line. Think of every story in which the aging wife, worried that she is no longer as young and attractive as she once was, falls for the attentions and flattery of some man: isn't that just fragile female ego?

3*** Sorry, 750 word stories can work , but this one didn't do it for me. Thanks anyway! cd

Short, sweet, and directly to the point.

Not a big fan of the 750-worders, but you did this about as well as it could be done, so I gave you five stars. I still prefer a writer of your talent actually write a whole story.

Hooked

Burn the slime Take everything from him in the divorce

Counterpoint is fair game. Brenda shouldn't be throwing down rules then acting surprised when they get used against her. I give a preemptive 5★ for not letting Brenda dictate to her husband the terms for her infidelity.

So he was a Boy Scout - he WAS prepared.

Hate when someone cheats and comes out with fragile ego! Bullshit, when you marry, you make a commitment to one person. That only changes if you both decide on swinging, where both parties get something out of the deal.

Good for you. Made it short and sweet!

I love your 750 word stories! This did not disappoint.

Brilliant

Sometimes your 750 words are a little frustrating but this was one of your best. You managed to get everything wrapped up in the 750 words. Great job.

Another what is good for the gander...

Not that I like what MC did alluding to having sex with DD queen but I like that swift serving of divorce papers to wifey.

Short and to the point.

"By design, it'll be incomplete."

So YOU choose to be lazy and write short unfinished stories?

Liked it! 5*

Jazzharp I agree, the full story is needed. I’ve a good idea, why don’t you write it?

Dump the preamble, get to the meat of it and I'd score you. ;-(

That’s an incomplete.

good short story

Same old same old. A wisp of nothing really. Ironically your need to justify/qualify your writing choices could perhaps be construed as a bit fragile…

Haha…… nice short and sweet. Robbie had plan, looks like Brenda plan was not thought out completely.

Thanks for sharing.

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I hate it when you don't finish the story ! No closure stinks !!

Liked it, another well done word limited story. I congratulate you on your attempts at this! And finally one that answers the bullshit of the "fragile male ego". But I wonder WHY these stories almost always seem to have a woman with DDs. Why not just a regular woman?

Would be nice to have another short on what happened after he gets home the next day... or 2... or.... 4 stars Bob

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 the elbow test , cushions from heaven 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣 I love this author’s descriptive abilities.

I like your stories and appreciate the concept of a challenge. Keep up the good work.

Especially on a forum where some will count the individual words and mention there are 751 instead of 750 (I didn't).

"By design, it'll be incomplete." - The "challenge" of a 750-word story is to write a COMPLETE story in 750 words.

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I personally don't care for self-referencing LW or Lit. These stories exist within the Lit universe.

OK, but a little bland.

Very good flash story! Who knew fleshing out a story like this would be so much fun. I went through four different scenarios before succombing to sleep. Keep up with the good work.

Yep, short and to the point. Keep writing!

Nah…..fell flat. His date coming on heels of having her served was anti climatic. Her being served, if not a final action on his part to get wifey’s attitude adjusted, should have been the end of it. Him having a date also was redundant to having her served. Although it was implied that wifey proceeded to have her date after being served, it wasn’t clear. In any event, lack of any reaction by her after being served robbed story of any impact.

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Bottom line…this was boring.

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3 ***

If it were me, I'd come home around midnight and not have sex with Brenda. If the wife had a change of heart, there would still be a chance. If not, at least I took the high road and I would feel good about that. However, as stories go, it worked just fine. Dates like that are at least as much about gaining control and breaking the equality of a good marriage as it is about the romance and that's the death knell to any good marriage.

I think the story was wonderful! He successfully put an end to her threat and found someone to give him her attention. Unfortunately, the spouse is usually blindsided in real life but it was refreshing to read his response

Nicely done. 5*

Fun little fantasy. I can say I would also not want to keep my wife had she pulled that on me but unfortunately I do not have a big boob replacement at the ready...

@ GarySmith69 "Why should anyone sit at home twiddling their thumbs?"

For the wives in stories of this type that's part of the buzz, that wifey gets all of the pleasure while hubby gets all of the distress and, she hopes, spends his evening alternating between stressing about what she's up to and jerking off. When hubby reacts in the way that the MC here does it's like a grenade has been lobbed into her plans. Bravo the MC for his perfect handling of the situation.

I always have to laugh at the 'fragile male ego' jibe and at the fact that the same trait in women is referred to as 'self esteem'. JR

Love it, you’ve done more with 750 words than some authors do with 2,000 words

Awesome!

Shorter is better in this case. Story STINKS!!!

If you add before and after you will get all five stars. other than that good job,

@HankWTullamore - Now, don't go criticizing @lc69hunter for the valuable service they provide.

They don't have a life, meaning they are quick to read and then comment on all of these stories. Thus, you can just jump to the bottom and quickly know how bad the story is by how much they liked it. Now, they can't be trusted on the actual comment itself, like how they call this a BTB, but their overall impression provides a simple metric for the story's quality.

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@funperson969 - I have no problem with good 750 word stories, but even if I did I would forgive you based on this one line that I truly loved:

"When she heard you were abandoning me tonight, she immediately volunteered to coddle my fragile male ego with her cushions from heaven."

Nothing original in this one

There’s been others who have the MC say that they consider themselves released from the marriage the moment she announced her date, but I believe this is the first story where she’s actually served before the date. Excellent!!!

ZK

Hahaha, loved it. Screw the haters and their fragile egos, whether male or female...

Was this a story or a writing exercise?

Bravo - great story!

Good but I like reading about the aftermath.

A short 750-word story didn't bother me. Just not a fan of large breasts. Prefer smaller breasted and very petite (@ 5') women. 3*

Attaboy

Not awful. Four stars for only 750 words.

JPB

Definitely 5 stars for this fun story of a man who gave his wife 1 shot to NOT screw up their marriage...

...and she blew it !

If I could, I would have given at least 3 more stars for "steamed Brenda's clams something fierce" !

Gonna have to remember THAT riposte !

LOL... very enjoyable read.

Do more !

Ah justice

Well done short story. You have the right idea not listening to complainers that want every last detail explained. I read way more stories where the author rattled on too long than stories that leave me with a sense of incompletion. This story hit the high points, so no more is necessary.

5 from me. I don’t get the obsession with longer stories. They are fine and the author can do more. This made a new point about fragile Female egos. If Iknew more, or less, about the characters and how their lives went on - so what?

I understand the exercise in reducing a story to its basic elements. On the other hand, you write well, and often the subsequent events and revelations are also very interesting. Please think about going further now and again.

A pleasant trifle. 4*s

Two people who are better off divorced. Who says divorce has to be traumatic, or one-sided? I hope they both live happily ever after. I'm betting on the aging like wine guy doing a bit better in the long run.

EXCELLENT!!! Nothing like "bitch slapping" a self entitled CUNT wife where it counts! Sad this doesn't happen more often but considering the number of "cheating WHORE wife Apologist", degenerate, Cuckroach writers that infest this site, you take what you can get!

***** 5 Stars *****

That was an interesting way to use your 750 words. He turned the tables on her completely, and even had the last word.

Short, sweet, simple. Five stars.

Good story but I'm not a fan of the 750 word thing. I've seen some good stories that could have been so much better if they were not condensed down.

Well played. And well written. And complete.

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First one I’ve seen to bring up the fragile female ego. Well done!

Neat, concise, and effective. Easy 5 stars. I enjoy 750s, since they don't contain much (or in this case any) fluff and take skill.

Awesome 👌

You did a very nice job in 750 words that others seem to struggle telling in 10.000 words. Great story. Thanks for the great effort in keeping it original, funny, and short.

Ed

Ohhhhh, a good time was had by all. Well, at least the husband. 🥳

Finally an ending that doesn’t have hapless husband waiting on her leaving to end things. Marriage was over as soon as the conversation was had. Stupid, stupid bitch.

5 + stars

Perfect for 750. Well played.

Lol good un

Straight to the heart of the matter by giving all the pertinent information and details within 750 words and kept it entertaining throughout. Damn impressive writing without wasting time and words. 5⭐️

Wham, Bam thank you mam! BRILLIANT! 5

Honestly, this is how most of these "loving cuckold" stories really should end, in the first thousand words or so.

Rod Stewart's big-bosomed lady with the Dutch accent... nice touch! Great turnaround!

I happen to really like short stories. They are a real test of an author's writing skills.

They are the equivalent of petite women - loveliness in a small package.

I also happen to love asian women. My Chinese wife is 5'5" and 110 lbs of loveliness.