All Comments on 'Fred and Martha Spouse Swappers'

This reads like a police report or post mortem. Repetitive, irrelevant detail. No passion whatsoever. As erotic as watching paint dry.

The dialogue sucks, too. No one ever talks the way these characters do.

Just boring. She did this. She did that. I did this. I did that …….

Blah

Will swapping turn to

Mom?

Can’t wait for the next chapter

Talk about your unnecessarily long preludes.

Also - Are well financed white married couples the only diaspora to swap? And having a doting housewife. Do I hear a harking for the Harriet and Ozzie days?

Too clinical. Reads as though they are at an appointment with their sex therapist. some passion is required and more earthy dialogue.

Such a tragic insistence on redundancy. The few possibilities of momentum are killed by such bland narration of uninteresting, petty details. And where’s a plot? Somehow the reluctant Jackie has to succumb to something—she either feared a certain thing would happen (like an affair with Fred) or was awakened to something unknown (like Fred’s better love making).

Hello, I’m from the Department of Redundancy Department. We’ve received some complaints about your dialogue. Your dialogue sucks. I will say that again because that’s what we do at the Department of Redundancy Department. Your dialogue sucks. You repeat the same shitty dialogue again and again and again! Everybody says the same things over and over and over, and probably over again, I’ve lost track. “I want to put my hard dick in your sweet creamy pussy” “I’ve been waiting for you to put your hard dick in my sweet creamy pussy.” They fuck. “I loved putting my hard dick in your sweet creamy pussy.” “I also loved it when you put your hard dick inside my sweet creamy pussy.”

You, Mominer, have been entered into our Annual Redundant Redundancy Contest of the Year! I have high hopes for you to win. I think you will win. Do you think you will win? I think you will win.