All Comments on 'Fridays at the Guardian Angel Ch. 01'

Beautifully written. It puts a lot of the sex scenes and just overall plots on Literotica to shame. I'll definitely be reading your other stories.

I've read longer, I've read a few things with more detail, but there's just something about the balance between what you've written and what you manage to evoke in the imagination of the reader that just makes this story work better than just about anything I've ever read here. Between this one, and it's sequel (as of reviewing, only a chapter 2) you've managed to write something that I'd almost call a little light on the smut, but managed to get me going even more than most other stories I've read. I'm really enjoying these, for more than just smut, but plot. This little world you've built is both interesting (and one I wouldn't mind living in in the least... would totally have a yellow bracelet on as soon as I was legal...)

I wish I was a bit better at giving critical reviews, as I know writers (generally) love that sort of feedback to improve... but honestly, as far as I'm concerned, you've got both a style, and the technical skill with the written word to back it up in a way that just makes me want to keep reading. Keep up the great work, I'll be checking back regularly for more!

This is the hottest futa story on this site. Bravo!

This is a really small point, but the way you introduced the girls' names at the start of the story was rather cliche. Like, it seemed like a rather forced way to shoe-horn their names in. And it was made even worse by the fact that you later actually gave them all their own proper introductions. It would've been so much better to give us their names for the first time when the main character was receiving them, then it would have been much more fluid.

Of course, I found the rest of the story great, otherwise I'd have so much more to complain about, right? So yeah, keep it up, because I'm definitely going to enjoy seeing where this story goes.

I really enjoyed the set-up and exposition style you used in this story. Looking forward to reading more!