All Comments on 'From The Heart - Rewrite'

Yes, better, but I had no real problems with the first one!

Good job clearing up the discrepancy between Missy’s “good-bye” and giggling later!

“still feeling nerves” - nervous

No problems with first version, but second version is better well done

Really adorable. I have heard similar cases in real life, things that we do not really understand, but that happen.

5 * for you.

I apologize for my English (yet and forever), is not my native language.

too contrived for me.

I enjoyed the inclusion of the funeral.

That was different. Nice. Very nice. But still, different. I'm still trying to wrap my head around some parts of it. But like I said, Nice.

That would have been better without the ghost or spiritist element, in my opinion.

It was a clever plot idea to have the second wife the recipient of the first wife's heart.

Paul in Oklahoma

That was much better. Closure..

They should have a daughter - Missy.

Much better than the original you could have another part still it's a five star

@olddave1 I specifically chose to end the rewritten version with the statement that Missy never spoke (or giggled) in their heads ever again. That's MISSY's ending. It wouldn't make sense for me to continue the story without her. It's somewhat similar to my decision to end "The Horny Ghost" (which involves ghostly possession OF a wife, instead of BY a wife) with that ghost's exit. It's not always the main protagonist/narrator who gets the happy ending.