by giveandreceive8
Nice story but ruined for me by the dialogue - I do not know two lovers who would speak to each other in that way.
cant you see this is a tongue in c heek...or tongue in cunt...satire or did the sublety escape you. try to read stories wit short words and senrences that dont strain your imagination.i pleaderh with thou not to stray away from your limited mental boubdaries.
A very good story. To the writer of the second comment: if you wish to intelligently correct somebody, at least learn how to spell. Still a good story! :)