All Comments on 'Fun in the Outdoors'

I found this to be a very sweet and playful story. I really enjoyed the playful banter between the two depicted, and your chosen style of writing as 'you and I' would help readers fantasize about the experience if they so desired. I thought it was a very real depiction of the slow transition of foreplay to lovemaking and the spoken words between the two throughout were also quite realistic and fun, in my experience at least! I sent you an 'anonymous feedback' email as well with a few suggestions for changes - please feel free to adopt or disregard as you see fit.