All Comments on 'Fun with the Folks Next Door Ch. 01'

Highly erotic and witty too... can't wait to read the next instalment,

Look forward to finding out the rest

First time I've been compelled to leave a comment -- how incredibly hot, intelligent, and dangerously exciting!!! Thanks -- now i'm moving on to the next installment!

The caps everywhere were pointless and annoying. You didn't have to introduce every single event with a personal comment from the character. I browsed through some of your other stories and it's all the same thing. A lot of people, like me, find that annoying as well.

First sentence: "The front door slammed shut after Bill a nervous voice came from upstairs." Makes no sense, and it got worse. I'm not a grammar nazi but this was too bad to continue reading. An editor could help.