All Comments on 'Fun with the Folks Next Door Ch. 01'

First sentence: "The front door slammed shut after Bill a nervous voice came from upstairs." Makes no sense, and it got worse. I'm not a grammar nazi but this was too bad to continue reading. An editor could help.

The caps everywhere were pointless and annoying. You didn't have to introduce every single event with a personal comment from the character. I browsed through some of your other stories and it's all the same thing. A lot of people, like me, find that annoying as well.

First time I've been compelled to leave a comment -- how incredibly hot, intelligent, and dangerously exciting!!! Thanks -- now i'm moving on to the next installment!

Look forward to finding out the rest

Highly erotic and witty too... can't wait to read the next instalment,