All Comments on 'Gabriel Ch. 01'

I agree with TN1969, a very nice start. Using that letter as an opening was different and worked for me. I also agree that the next should be a bit longer and I'm waiting for it because I can't see where you're going with it.

I agree with TN1969, a very nice start. Using that letter as an opening was different and worked for me. I also agree that the next should be a bit longer and I'm waiting for it because I can't see where you're going with it.

A very nice start. Very well written. Warm, melancholy feelings that are either drawn from experience or evidence of a vivid imagination...or likely both? I like the character already. Hopefully the next chapter won't be too long in coming and I wouldn't mind it if it was a bit lengthier. Good luck and good writing. TN1969

When you select the middle star for a rating, it says "Liked it, keep writing"--couldn't have said it better. I don't think this piece was finshed enough to submit it when you did. It needed more, then go on to chapter 2.