All Comments on 'Gamer Mom to Egirl'

Awesome story. Any way u can add a sex scene or two with lizzy ?

Good with an excellent story line.

However, you do need to re-read your work before publishing - misspelled words, using single verbs for multiple subjects etc etc.

I know you probably want to write quickly to get your ideas on paper (so to speak) but do give yourself time and so make it more enjoyable for your readers.

Hey everyone,

I spent some time with some editing software and fixed some of the glaring errors. Should read much easier now. Thank you to Nina for editing. The new copy should be up soon.

I always love a fall from grace mind control story

This one was arousing af