All Comments on 'Gargouille Ch. 01'

If you don't mind the suggestion, I have the feeling all you need is a good editor to help you tell what could be a wonderful story. There are glimpses of some really good things already. I look forward to seeing what more you can do.

I think you have some good potential in here, but it's current readability is very limited by the lack of a good editor. I would very much like to see where you can go with this with an editor to help polish it up for you.

It is an interesting premise for a story and a good editor would make it an interesting story. I hope you continue,

I wouldn't be mad if you got an editor, but I could say I'd be much happier. I hate simple mistakes that I know people sometimes just don't catch, and an editor would be great for that.

This story has potential but it has so many errors that makes it hard for a reader to get through it.

I loved the story, you have a great imagination, just needs to be edited. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Thank you for a Great first chapter. I love the whole two-Gargoyle one mate thing you got going on, very original. I honestly can't wait to see how they end up meeting and how the relationship between each other grow. Anyway's please make sure to up-date soon, and I again honestly can't wait for more!!! P.S Please check your mail:D

I'm glad to see you have an editor now, and I'm looking forward to seeing how you bring these interesting and very different characters together in chapter two.

I'm glad to see this story back. I am excited to see what is the same and what has changed for chapter 2 and beyond. The story is looking great and don't mind the editor comments; that just goes to show who read the authors note at the beginning of the story.

your imagination is just wow. you got the ability to take your readers in a world out of this world. thats what l call talent

So good.

I remember the original post. Glad you listen to the comments and got an editor..the re-post is the bomb. Nicole is so fiesty. The whole Scottish thing is hot.

A friend told me of this story. Great so far

Off to read chp 2...Scottish men are so sexy..well my opinion any way..giggles

Like the story so far,but wasn't the migration of West Indian workers to fulfil jobs in Britian in the 50's-60's that is when when Britian was looking for skilled workers from abroad by the 80's Black Britian were facing unrest that led to such things as the Brixton riots etc. I'm sure people were still coming over for work but as far as being sought out was definitly before