All Comments on 'George, Donna and... Charlie? Ch. 02'

Interesting turn of events! I guess that there will be more chapter(s)?

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Needs more so we can see where this ends up.

I’d like to be the proverbial fly on the wall at that birthday party. Tantalizing bit of drama. Thank you.

Drat Untrapped error this line "Charlotte paled "expensive?" he whispered." SHOULD have read "Charlotte paled "expensive?" she whispered." Dmn Wirlss kyboard, again.

Good addition. Looking forward to the next part!

Very good sequel, but it almost calls for another one.

Good follow-up, and you could leave it as this, but you have some promising characters and points of conflict and Donna still needs her say after therapy, so would like to see a continuation.

After the first chapter and its opportunities,I think this is a big let down,in fact a nothing story.

Is it just me that I can't open the first chapter?

Is the link broken?

Ugh! You NEED a new editor, preferably one who will help you get over the camma diarrhoea you suffer from.

I need to "get over the camma (sic) diarrhoea"?

I have never mentioned Camma (you should have capitalised that, as it's a proper name) who was a Galatian princess and priestess of Artemis.

Now that boss one great twisted stuff there. Very creative very well spun and poignant

What was the point of this story? First chapter was enjoyable, this chapter just went no where.⭐️

i think more chapters are needed

Nice ending, although another chapter would be great

Part 2 made it better. Gave a better understanding of Charlie's complete breaking of ties with the family. Humanized the story a lot. A part 3 could make the motivations of 'not-spouse' and children more complete but not essential.

Nice to see George recovering.

Thanks for sharing. fregen

Left like this,there is no point to CH two.

You covered your cheap shot against Charl(whatever).... which was actually a good thing, in the long run.

Now, since there seems to be a desire for a continuation - how about some kind of relationship between George and Charlotte? It would appeal to a rather narrow part of the commentariat, and give warning to those who try to dictate terms to authors...

Green-something

The characters are now more believable; they have more depth.

Uh? That's it?

There is an hour between a 10 am appointment and an 11 am appointment.... not that I can't fix such problems in my head, though it does tend to make for a rougher ride.

Green-something

[15.09.23]

More chapters pls sir!

11/10!!!!!

Feel let down by this nothing story ,compared to the first chapter.

Totally anticlimactic no resolution at all and no hope of any

NO! A THOUSAND TIMES NO. RUN FROM THR CRAZY DUDE BEFORE HE GOES TRANS KILLER ON A SCHOOL.