All Comments on 'Ghostbusters'

Maybe the ghosts are aliens!

5

Fun. Very well written. Thank you.

i really liked this story. Its right up my alley. I can see and communicate with spirits. I eliminate evil spirits a lot. I can grab them and move them if need be but mostly prayer works. Your story was very entertaining for me

I feel really bad for the ex-wife. Living and loving a shit like him is just awful. Frankly, he should get down on his knees and beg her forgiveness. He doesn't need to take her back if she even wants him, which I doubt, but he does owe her a huge fucking apology. Though, she was kind of a fool for marrying such an emotionally stunted guy to begin with.

The other woman liking him is pretty unbelievable too.

Good story but I'm pretty sure Irina would not have married him in the first place. And the super rational protagonist would certainly have no truck with marriage.

Bizarre but well written.

5 stars

Loved it.

I wish you’d put a note at the beginning of the story that this was part of a contest you’ve been sucked into. These “themed challenges” rarely work, and this is no exception. It seems forced and laborious. When a story doesn’t come from your heart it’s the wrong one.

I know we probably aren't supposed to, but I actually felt bad for Irina. She wanted him to open up, but he just didn't understand.

well - that's wasted time I'll never get back.

I liked the story, but I’m at a loss as to why it is in Loving Wives rather than SciFi and Fantasy.

That was one of the best stories I have read in a long time. It was funny as hell, in an understated way. I have no problem giving this top scores. It was really good.

I have no idea what I just read, but it was mildly entertaining!

As the old German would intone, “Interesting, but DUMB”

Thanks. Good change of pace on this site.👍

Outstanding . 5*

Being a "nerd" with lesser understanding of others than "normal" I enjoyed this once I understood that it is an allegory. I really understand the the journey from not showing emotions to not having emotions. I passed through both until a woman found me, understands me, and selflessly loves me. Slowly, I have learned from observing her and "feeling" her. It has been decades; I am loved and loving and joyful among our families. I could not have earned this reward. It was given to me with Faith.

Brilliant, original, and well written

Unique, detailed, fun - loved it! Laughed at the socks tag.

I enjoyed that as kind of a guilty pleasure.

Very good authorship.

Barely LW well not even close to LW category. Interesting and well written. Enjoyed the read whatever it was.

How on earth (or not) does Stev come up with this stuff? Absolutely hilarious story. Who ya gonna call?

A treasure

Had to give you 5 stars of r this very unusual and surprisingly fun story. I'm glad you posted it in LW because I'd never have read it in sci-fi

The best I've read on this site.

Mr. 2244 always brings imagination to the table. Loveable characters and an excellent writing job. Thank you, Randi.

Excellent!

I especially enjoyed the way you slowly unfolded the main characters personality.

Really fun stuff!

Awesome story and well written. 5*

Hysterical. Definitely not the usual LW story plot line. 5-star effort.

Hooked

Entertaining, creative and touching.

Very not bad.

Wow, to comment seems hollow, as this was such an exceptionally creative piece of literature. Way over my head to enter into, but I did appreciate it. A very clear 5, and thanks.

5* -- actually loved it ... very original.

It's like Sheldon meets Literotica. Odd and unexpected. Not completely unpleasant though.

Nicely done! Might be my favorite by you.

This is a great story! Reminds me of my days in AnnArbor Mi. 5stars

Great writing as always, but can’t give you full score for pulling a false flag on us. Clearly a fantasy covered in a LW veneer. 4*

Made it through half of the first page and found it as exciting as watching paint dry. Actually I've found every story in this event as exciting as watching paint dry.

What a weird but interesting story…. I must have slipped into the land of Sci-Fi. It certainly was different.

Outstanding. After all, a great story of overcoming a devastating childhood. 5*

That was a good story. Thank you.

I wish I liked it more; that was a lot to chew through, to get anywhere.

I have no feelings about your story either way, but my rational mind tells me that it would make you happy to be awarded 5 stars for your effort.

Hardly a loving wife story.

Almost passed on this due to the title. Glad I didn't. It was 4.01* when I clicked on it. Hopefully my 5* will give that a small boost.

@Anonymous Re: Apology - I don't think he owes his ex an apology, he had no control over who he was. As you yourself say, it was sort of her fault for marrying him in the first place.

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@Anonymous Re: Feel bad for Irina - I think it's okay to feel bad for Irina. He even understands what she was trying to do.

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For those who felt it didn't belong in LW, he had a cheating wife, even though her intentions were good.

Good story. But he should send his ex a nice thank you card for trying.

George basically polished a shit into a shiny shit. I have neither the time nor the minute brain space to comprehend or decipher this mess.

And now for something completely different (to steal a line from Monte Python.) From now on I will be wary of people who seem to be too calm and scientific. Who knows, they may be looking for strange alien monsters to slay! LMAO!

Very well done. Creative. Funny. An original.

If you'd rather, I could insult your intelligence, writing ability, and parentage. This is LW, right?

Your storytelling is as descriptive as ever. Maybe even better, this time? I was in that abandoned factory, on that alien world and in that cave.

5* story. Just remarkable.

Not a even close to a LW stories.

Stev2244 makes a classic line for healthy living into a great story. One must turn and embrace or destroy ones demons so they stop biting you in the a_s!

Perfectly stated and utterly correct.

Only fools lost themselves in the illusion of that feeling. Love was merely a chemical reaction in the brain, and not a helpful one. It led to irrational behavior, much like a mild poisoning.

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Sentiment is a chemical defect found in the losing side....

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---S.HOLMES

Great fun story so well written. Thanks for the entertainment 5*

There are very few offers I despise and hate more than Steve 2244. He is easily the most overrated Author in the loving wife's category. His stores are always crap they never make any sense and people sit there and they masturbate and genuflect over his crappy stories.

Certainly weird, but a lot of fun.

I especially liked “Once again, I decided the probability of overwhelming emotions improving my life was quite low, even if I managed to somehow come up with some. I mean, Irina obviously had deep feelings, and look what they did to her.”

And Star Trek crew members with red shirts. Thanks.

Very good story, and very creative. Definite 5!

Well written and creative. I was wishing though that he would get back with Irina, she really tried.

One of a kind, sort of. Not just your run-of-the-mill garden-variety LW dimensional travel and aliens cum romance tale, but if you write more I'll read 'em. Deal?

That was an interesting concept, well written.

Nicely done! I think the super negative commentis from the anons about the contest and not liking these kinds of stories are kinda like your MC before he got clued in. Maybe they will grow too! :). Excellent story.

Fantastic.

Can’t help but feel that he owes his ex-wife an apology. She was right; he was damaged and his inability to “feel it” was a continuous denial of her reality which in this case was real. If he thinks that her desperate attempt to get through his denial was equal to the years of negation he offered her before… well he is new to the feeling game…

Well, that was different! It was very readable, but not that engaging. I didn’t really care about the characters, especially the Uber-rational MC.

Started off great as it was hillarious. I thought he was autistic in the beginning. Then with Irina talking about how he was dead inside I thought he must have had serious childhood trauma that had stunted him. So, now I thought this was going to use the "ghostbusters" as part of his imagination to get at the "dark" recesses of his mind to get the core of the trauma. It did, but the ending was quite disappointing for me. There was this set up of using a tool to get to the psyche, so expected thoughtful introspection and delving into his being and instead it was a few lines of he had a horrible father who was extremely abusive and boom he is cured. The promised depth of delving into the psyche never really materialized and was quite the letdown.

Was not going to score, becuase I usually like your work and feel let them; however, I decided to score based on your laurels and the fact that the first page and a half or so was pretty funny when I thought he was autistic.

I honestly dont get the good ratings for this. It was too long, too wordy, and written in too 'nerdy' a style for me to enjoy it. And while he previously had a cheating wife, none of the current characters were her, so why put it in the LW category? All in all, no reason for me to recommend.

Creative fun story. Thanks!

Please keep writing. This was a darn good tale!

Original and nice!

I suppose the story falls under the category of finding yourself I guess, while exorcising your demons? Happiness, love, hurt, sadness, boredom, depression, anger, relief, which one do we deal with, one of them? two of them or all of them? 5 stars for originality, at least for me.

nice story original and whimsical....

5 stars and well earned

Cagivagurl

That was a fun read. Thank You!

Lame at best.

Well written and a very fun concept, this was a very enjoyable read. It was very dry humor with some great references mixed in for fun. I felt sorry for his ex because she tried to pull him out of his shell but you can’t save someone if they don’t want to be saved. I liked how that changed and hope at the end that his future really will be different. Thanks for writing and for participating in the event.

Well done! A cool angle from a ground breaking movie! Gotta love the 80’s was definitely a better overall era than today.

Some cool twists - probably get me thinking later!

Yes have to favorite this story as I am likely to want to read again! Man who has no fear - actually has no or very few emotions and he is not Batman 😁!

Please do keep writing and I will keep reading.

Campy and cool in a Ghost Buster sorta way. :) Well done!

Nicely done mashup of Ghostbusters and Big Bang Theory with a garnish of Star Trek. Dragged a bit (too many prefatory expeditions?), and poor Irina earned a reconciliation by spending years with the emotionless TIm, but when he is traumatically zapped into feeling emotiions, Cara winds up with the trophy just for sleeping on a dirty floor in a creepy building. Those who ask why Irina marries him in the first place should keep in mind that he was reasonably attractive and women convince themselves they can smooth out their partner's rough edges (while men hope their partner never changes and certainly never cuts her hair). I wanted to give Stev another 5, but a strong 4 was the best I could do. Do keep writing, sir, please, and pay little or no attention to HiV.

Loved it!

Strikes me as YA.

@a_bierce - "poor" Irina? She used a clueless emotionally damaged individual to get a started husband and a standard of living, then shamelessly cheated on him **in attempt to severely emotionally hurt him, on purpose** pretending it was for his own good. Wherever she is, I hope the bitch is suffering, hard. If she had issues with his lack of emotions, she didn't have to, y'know, marry him.

Brilliantly done. 10* if I could have. Alas 5 will have to do.

As an Aspie or “on the spectrum” as they now say, I recognized myself in the MC. If only I could be transported to another dimension in order to comprehend feelings…sigh.

5 stars for trying…

Quite silly. But, I like it.

Reading prior comments, while I agree that Irina ended up with a crapoy marriage to an emotionally stunted husband, she clearly has her own issues pulling that ridiculous shock stunt. Reconciliation between then was never going to be possible. Why isn't it OK that Cara benefits from his changed emotional state? Irina saw him as broken (he was), though he coukd be fixed by her (not possible) and felt trapped in a loveless marriage (she was). But when you burn your marriage like that, there is no way back. Suppose instead that she said she was unhappy, he cannot share with her, and she asks for an amicable divorce. He gets his emotions back, looks her up and finds her alone, still despondent over their failed marriage. But whe never cheated. Then maybe a reconciliation. But wasn't thr way the story was written. Author's prerogative.

I feel bad for his first wife. I don't think she fully understood just how emotionally stunted he was. Yeah, the way she went about trying to break him out of it was dumb, but I think she just got so desperate everything was on the table.

Haven’t read all your stuff but this is my favorite so far. Clever and funny and a bit sad. Loved it. Thanks.

Clever story.

I agree with how a typical wife acts when trying to 'get a man out of his shell' — they'll never understand who put him in it or even try to. Their only method is to provoke and force it out of him by hurting him as badly as they can, whether it's via cheating or humiliating him in front of her friends.

Pity you can't have the same effect on them by doing the same, as it brands you an arsehole for no reason. But still, do it anyway if you have to for equality's sake.

I liked the emotionally detached main character concept you developed in "Watching the Clouds" and Tim in this was similar. The ideas were well portrayed and I enjoyed his reactions towards what he felt were ridiculous people and circumstances. I actually identified with his scientific approach to things and the way he behaved the first time they asked him to enter a building and how he analyzed it made the story interesting for me. I could have used a little more description of the aliens and the landscape he entered, and I felt that their reaction after he'd killed the last bio-weapon was a little lackluster considering their efforts to get rid of it in the first place. If they were that detached and dispassionate, why would they even bother bringing someone from another world to get rid of something that preyed on fears? Still, it was a fun idea. I do wish that a little more attention had been given to post-epiphany Tim and Cara. What drew her to him and why? Despite that, though, I liked this story a lot. Hopefully stev writes more in this vein.

It was like reading my autobiography. I wish an alien intervention had been somewhere in my past…oh well. My first wife ran off with the lead guitar player in my band. Other than his guitar skills he was rather unimpressive. Cry for help? Interesting concept. Back to multidimensional databases and dreaming in binary code.

My question is in his emotionally stunned state. How did he pick up a wife in the first place? He seemed totally withdrawn into his own self and did not interact with other people.