All Comments on 'Ghosted'

Maybe a silly story, but intriguing and wonderfully erotic scene. And no need in my opinion for much character development. Looking forward to more from your vivid imagination.

A very nice first story ... but I thought the sudden decision to forget women and switch to men was a bit abrupt. Except for that, the concept of your story was good.

Not bad! Perhaps not perfect, but there were many things I liked about it. I do like the fact that you leave details up to the reader. Sometimes getting too hung up on describing the details of a person breaks the flow of the story. So not only does the reader get to imagine for themselves, but it also allows you to avoid risking crossing that line between giving detail, and focusing too much on it instead of the narrative. All my subjective opinion, I'm no professional author or critic. Keep writing!