All Comments on 'Girl in the Painting'

I really liked your story. You developed the plot in a way that you created the tension needed so that the reader enjoyed the nudity even more.

Excellent story and very endearing to the emerging characters. It feels like a blossoming romance as well. So, I expect you to think on adding further episodes. Maybe both grandmothers invited to an exhibition event eventually. It seems like a relationship that could so not one more chapter, but a full series of them.

Maybe you could have Beth take up some gymnasium work-out when she goes to college, and their efforts to be together as often as possible. I do not think you have to rush to copulation with this pair, as they could find fun exploration together without that too soon. You are already stirring the sense of a really deep friendship for Beth and Aaron.

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Beautifuy developed, built up the sense of erotic tension and brought it through to the climax.

Great story, I would like a follow story as Beth expands her knowledge.

Hope you continue with this story. Enjoyable - of course I see a FIRST TIME Part 2 :)

Thank you for writing

A very well-crafted story; very realistic and enjoyable read.

The author should expand their biography so we can appreciate the source.

A simple yet beautiful story. And extremely well told. It developed slowly and gently and leaves us wanting more. Great job!

This is superb -- so, so sweet, but also with well drawn characters and credible development. I love it.

Well done! Understated, well paced, and *almost* innocent. I do hope it continues.

Keep this story going. And soon.

Great story line and well written.

A really well written, enjoyable, sexy story.

I do hope this story continues.

Please lets us have a second chapter, I really enjoyed this one

A very sexy and enjoyable read. Certainly one of the best I've read here. Very hot and very sexy.

Yes, this story is a turn-on, but more than that, it has a sweetness that tears at the heart. Thank you.

Amazing

Very well done indeed. Nothing to fault! Delightfully slow and gentle.

Very sweet and erotic. A part 2 would be very much appreciated. They're neighbors who attend the same school, so there are dozens of possibilities. This relationship is just beginning.

Beautiful story. Very well written. Not a loss of innocence but a blossoming of innocence. You paint the innocence so well---the way Beth takes so seriously the maxims about what good girls should and shouldn't do, the way she conscientiously swims her laps after everyone else has gone home, the way that Aaron is so intent on his sketching that he fades into the background. And you paint the blossoming so well too. "And I am her—the girl in the painting. And I do want him to see all of me."

It's nice to read a story in which characters have an underlying sense of propriety and modesty. It makes the blossoming more intimate and erotic. So, in answer to the hope in your member page bio, I'd say you're well on your way. Thanks for posting, and best wishes for your future projects, here or elsewhere.

Great story. Thank you!

Beautiful job. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of your submissions.

Great job with this. I liked the progression, and the descriptions of the Beth were great. I liked that she wasn't a "supermodel" or waif. I enjoyed it!

Beth the answer is yes, yes you can watch, you could lend a hand . Aaron should remain as he is while he paints. This would make a good illustrated story. Think Rebecca, housewives at play.

I do like your stories, there are o ly 6 or so, girl you need to 'get busy'

Excellent, nice rhythm and feeling, painting pictures with words, you have a gift...

An amazing, well written and erotic story; what an absolute gem to discover. Love the originality and imagery. A beautiful work, I will definitely read more of yours now.

- ShadowLuver