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All Comments on 'Girl with the DreamCatcher Tattoo'

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Bi47Bi47over 4 years ago
Mmmmmmmm

Excellent!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Omart57Omart57over 4 years ago
WoW!

Origins , You have a terrific imagination! Great story! Five stars and favorited!

AnonymousAnonymous11 months ago
Huh?

Had possibilities, but you took no time to develop the characters or story. Not everything can be wham, bam, done; especially writing.

This is good for a story idea. That's it. Develop it, flesh it out Give some life, depth & realism to your characters & you'll have something.

GeoD

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Been writing for a while, will be posting more, all that were mostly written for my wife. As much as I love feedback, be polite! As one of my readers pointed out, this is an amateur site, I'm no professional and write to arouse, not to make a living. Some of my stories have ...