All Comments on 'Give Me the Man Pt. 04'

I just can't think of anything critical to say!

Okay, maybe one thing. Although I quite like how polite all of your characters are, I think that they are a bit too homogenous. Everyone is polite, competent, confident, and trustworthy. Also, all of the people are beautiful! Not a single missing tooth, everyone's hair seems to be perfect, everyone's sexy, everyone's trim and fit.

I'd love to read more. I agree with one of the other commenters, though; there are at least a few places in each of these stories where it feels like they're overly-formal, and more casual phrasings would have worked better. I'm fairly sure that's intentional, based on other things you've written, but I think it might be overdone.

Still, I look forward to seeing more of the story!

I started this series several months ago, but got distracted. Saw the new chapter so I started over at chapter 1. This is a great story told with finesse and character development. Very enjoyable. I'll finish the series commenting on my way.