by HypnoticGold
Grammar & spelling need a little polish & editing but great story (I read Chapter 1 also). I also indulge in this pastime. Not so much the drinking but definitely the tasting and pussy cleanup. Keep more coming.
Dear HypnoticGold
Great sequel to the first part. Yet I'll only give you four stars - please take a little more time with editing. At a certain point, the story just seems to run away: typos increase, words are missing, thoughts are rushing.
The story itself remains as great as the first part (which got all five stars), albeit I'd have liked had you given away Cindy later in the story: her early mention of her desire to pee in his mouth takes out quite a bit of the suspense (many other outcomes would have been possible: she doesn't dare, she only lets him watch, she is tricked into it by Sammy...).
Finally: Thanks a lot for this great work and your thrilling fantasies. Keep up the good work - I'll jump strait to part three now!
Best regards
Alpian
As strange as it sounds talking about a piss fetish story, the belching was disgusting and jarring and took me out of the scene completely. Leave that out and this would be a 5 star read.
I've thought about playing this game. I'd LOVE to try it. And this is the way I'd LOVE to try it. Please!