All Comments on 'Gone Fishing'

It started off well and was overall a sexy story. I did find the dialogue to be a little fake. Good luck in the contest.

I give anybody props that posts something for public criticism. I found the language fake myself most of the time. If you don't do good here you could always turn it into Hustler. One of those stories that really happened.

I was initially interested -- the description of the plane landing was vivid and I thought, this story will have an interesting plot. But the moment the characters laid eyes on each other, they started fucking and that was the entire story. It was implausible and they didn't seem like real people.

I appreciate the comments. I was unsatisfied with the end product of this attempt, myself. It felt forced. I will try harder, next time.

To write so much sustained sex with so little context is very difficult to do. You did it very well. Good luck.

loved it very much can not wait for part 2