by Slider1234
Great story. I had to read it straight thru, couldnt put it down. It read like a movie.
The style is trite, juvenile, and the grammar needs a ton of work. 13 pages long, and 3 of them were worth the read.
Great Story dont usually read long stories, but after the first page I just had to. Any sequels to this will be greatly appreciated
I don't know what that guy was saying about it being juvenile. I thought it was a beautiful story. Yeah so what it was 13 pages I thought that build the anticipation and made the story that bit more rewarding. As for semantics/grammar etc. unless it makes the story unreadable I don't see it as the slightest issue. Slider this was one of my favourite stories on literotica - keep it up.
I liked it. I've read it a few times and didn't know what exactly to think, but I believe I do like it. I wish you'd done it in chapters rather than two really, really, REALLY long stories, but other than that, yeah, it's good...considering it's the only story on this site about Larisa.
Best one of the three because it makes me so happy! Would have thought more comments then this though...
Billy
All I can say is, that this is the single best story (erotic or otherwise) that I have ever read. I cannot imagine the time and effort that you took writing this story. It is a MASTERPIECE. PLEASSSE write more!!!