All Comments on 'Good Girl Ch. 01'

Decent premise.

Terrible story.

And you really need an editor proofreader. You wrote: "...the tole that time and life can take..." TOLE? (That's "painted, enameled, or lacquered tinplate used to make decorative domestic objects.") You mean TOLL.

One star.

Not quite sure how the whole she was a religious girl fit into the scenario. it's an overused an inaccurate cliche. I have to agree with anon's comment. you truly need someone to check your work before you submit. 1/5*