All Comments on 'Gotta Pay the Piper Ch. 23'

Each chapter is always as good better then the last. Enjoyable read about the punishment period and like the emotions and interaction of the characters. Well done. 5 Stars. Cheers

High five ... ya done it again !!! With that said, git to work and put another two or three or more chapters out.!!!

Bravo. You setup a nice example to examine how people regard "slaves" differently. Not just the people in your imaginary world, but the readers of your tale. Is there difference about how the reader feels about the slave's plan for revenge, vs. the near identical punishments inflicted upon the slaves.

Now of course there are some different circumstances, mostly in the self-justifications used by the various (in some case would-be) perpetrators. And there is definitely narrative sympathy (the story teller making it clear the slaves are unrepentant and blame others for their own actions). But from a moral standpoint the actions intended and the actions done were pretty much the same. So, at least for the introspective reader, it is a nice exercise in morla judgements.

I am amazed how you have created this world that existed on a premise I can’t imagine but has become so interesting. Great story

Shined? SHONE!!!

SHINE

past tense: shined; past participle: shined

1.(of the sun or another source of light) give out a bright light.

"the sun shone through the window"

2.direct (a torch or other light) somewhere in order to see something in the dark.

"he shone the torch around the room before entering"