All Comments on 'Government Mandated Family Fun Pt. 01'

Excellent story! Can't wait to read future chapters!!

Interesting concept on where this C virus might head. Look forward to the next chapter.

One of the best

Great concept and a fun read.

Get rid of the condoms

Good story. Better than I anticipated.

A bit of advice: read through the story before you submit it for publication. A few times, actually, and at least once out loud. This will help catch some of the errors. I know it's a difficult thing to edit your own writing, but this will help.

I won't even suggest that you try to find an editor. The free editor I've tried were absolutely no help.

You never know, this could happen......

Love it, can't wait for more chapters! Thanks for writing.

Love how you used this ridiculous pandemic and it's restrictions that are driving people crazy even now. Look forward to Part II. Thanks for sharing with us all.

I agree with cageysea9725, HOWEVER, ignore the story for a few days, THEN reread it out loud.

Pretty boring and plain Jane. Maybe you will jazz it up in the next part.

It has definitely piqued my interest to see where you will take this

Enjoyable read! Imagined the characters as the Dunphys from Modern Family :D Looking forward to the next chapter.

PS: I personally like some conflict/reluctance/build up before the actual incest. Makes it more believable and rewarding for the readers. Would've liked to see more of that. Rated 4 stars for the interesting premise!

Looking forward to future chapters.

Very interesting concept. As to his sister, talk about being a Debbie Downer!! Looking forward to the next chapter. Five stars and a favorite point!

I love this story. Can wait for next chapter

Very cool concept. But the only thing I had a little problem with was the having a girlfriend and having to hear the exploits with her family. Under the conditions in the story as soon as she mentioned wanting to try the incest. He should have said sure your single and walked away. Then got with his sisters or his mom. The way it's playing out the entire planet is loaded with cheaters no matter how you bend the rulea

I have a strong feeling Deb is going to be the nasty sex machine soon lol

Thanks everyone for your comments and suggestions.

The condom problem will be solved very early in part 2. I agree condoms are a bit of a buzz-kill (in fiction and real life!) But I didn't feel the story could jump straight into full unprotected sex.

I've got character progression planned, especially for Deborah. And Jennifer's relationship with William (post-incest) will be explored a lot more in part 3.

Do you have any other story ideas or suggestions you'd like to see?

I wonder if this is how it will go, great story.

Great concept especially for incest lovers, definitely waiting for more parts..

Great concept! Loved the ideia

Great concept! Loved the idea of incest becoming normal in a society and people talking about it (like de soap opera the neighbours families). Something like they seeing on tv a really famous person, or a political, annoucing they ar adapt of this family love would be nice to seee

Concept is new and your writing is awesome. Please share the next part asap

Story was well written just not my cup of tea

Great concept l. More please

another chapter would be great!

Love the plot…. Keep going!

Amazing story, can't wait for the next chapter :)

can't wait for more of this story. more please

I normally don't enjoy much hetero work darling but this was very well done and I enjoyed it very much! Looking forward to a second part!

wish we could have a second chapter on this

amazing!

is the next chapter cumming?

i need a new chapter or similar story to this! The government mandated idea is so hot

wish there was more :)

Premise seemed pretty good and I like the beginning but the utter demanding and demeaning sister was when I stopped. Thanks for sharing this though.

So much you can do with this storyline. A winner

Dear Author! Please use a flash drive to back up your data! :)

Good premise and really good story, but it needs a second part.

would occasionally check if this has a sequel. wish you'd come back to this and hope you're well

The concept of this story is great. There badly needs to be a part 2.

Any word on the next chapter.

This story as such potential, especially after reading the other one you wrote! Can't wait for chapter 2 ;)