All Comments on 'Green Eyes, Small Breasts'

I loved all of the references, and I got every one of them. Your story kept me on the edge, all the way to the end, and I didn't skip over a word.

I'd like to read a version of this without the asides - as NotWise said, they kept throwing me out of the story, and I gave up early. Which is a shame, because I glanced at some later sections without too many parentheses and they seemed nicely written. And what's not to like about a green eyed woman with small breasts?

You captured in wonderful detail a magical day and evening. Perfect ending although a small wish for resolution of their together lives. But he should be able to leave stronger, more committed to his life and its conclusions and beginnings.

All the little (side notes) were really annoying. (Really). They were distracting (truly they were) and kept interrupting the story. (I couldn’t get past the first page.)