All Comments on 'Group Activities - Jin & Shay'

Started out good but ending great. Nicely written.

I like the moving pieces and unpredictability of the whole story. Very original. I like that you mentioned the accent, it gave me something extra to fantasize while reading this. Excellent work old chap.

Interesting take on the whole traveling hotel scene. The main character needs to be defined much more. There was good detail on the other characters and surrounding area. Not enough details on him to fully get a scope of the while scene unfolding before us. The writing could be improved a bit. I suggest getting someone to proof read before submitting. None the less I enjoyed the story. The ending sounded as if there would be more chapters. I will be interested to see an improvement in writing along with your good story line.

Not as hot as your other writings but still a solid read.

Not bad, kinda satisfying.

5 stars!

The part I enjoyed the most has to the the voice recording. It added a kinkier and different element to the typical three way trope.

I love me some older woman!

The cream pie parts were a nice touch. Personally I would have had the woman make the men suck each other off. That is real control. Multiple scenes where you had a chance to make the story much hotter if you added more of the taboo of m 2 m cock sucking. You have to learn your audience and what we want.

I read both stories in this group and I cannot tell which one I like better.

Is one man eating another man's jizz from a vagina count as gay or bi. Great story.