All Comments on 'Gypsy Designs Ch. 02'

But still needs a once-over by another set of eyes, I think. Again, mostly it's punctuation. Caydn and Gypsy are fun, though, and I really am enjoying this.

Many, many, many grammar and punctuation errors. You tend to miss out small words within the sentences. The reader can still understand but it is distracting. Do you have an editor?

Your story, characters and pace are very good. Please find an editor to catch the errors I am sure you do not intend. They interfere with a smooth reading.