All Comments on 'Half-Breed Princess Ch. 01'

This was a great read. I really hope that you will carry on with this story line. Keep it comming. The Female lead just keept making me smile :))

Good start, looking forward to the rest of the story

But it seemed a little rushed at the party, especially after the window breaks. You start with a good introspective pace, as she explores her feelings about all that happens. But once the window breaks, suddenly a man is at her back with a knife. And the dragon knows the intruders from the visiting humans. The dispatch of all the intruders is almost an afterthought to the story.

Keep your pace, since that is what is allowing you to bring your characters to life and draw us in to the story. This is a good start to what may be an EXCELLENT story.

I can't wait to read more. You don't here of many half-vamps in stories. Great concept. Keep it going.

The dragon Silver reminded me very much of Simi the little demon of Acheron of the Dark Hunter series of Sherrilyn Kenyon.

I won't judge you so early base on the similarity yet but you have a lot of work here. Spellings and grammar mistakes were aplenty. Clean them up and your story would flow smoother.

But a little rushed...the part of dancing with Jin and then after the window breaks, the pace goes break-neck! One piece of advice, slow down...savor the plot-line! Great concept though...half-vampire!

Vampire Princess Miyu is a great story. Making a half human adaptation is interesting.

You just got to love the strong heroines!

Thanks.