by hroy2
I think this story would have been infinitely better with more character development. Otherwise, it reads like quick sex without a purpose. Yes, longer stories take more time to write, but I think the investment would have been well taken here. Good luck!
Ummm, a little arithmetic shows you are writing about a 37-year old virgin?
Nice story, but that was a bit too unbelievable.
Good luck though.
Seemed way too easy for them to just do it like that. Where's the emotion, the guilt, the forbidden? Could be a good tale if more time was taken to develop the characters and their situation.
I loved your story. Must have been based on something real? So nice to read that even a man of God could have feelings of love for a woman. And extra nice that he let himself experience the depths of her love and did not let the poor thing pine forever to feel broken hearted and unwanted.
I meant Tale~ I enjoyed your story, A touching tale... (~_*) good luck and Happy Halloween...