All Comments on 'Halos and Heroes Ch. 17'

The mark of a good writer in my mind is when the story comes alive in my head and I can actually see the story taking place. You’ve done this with this story. I love that it is a well told story and the main character just happens to be gay. Finally!!

I can’t wait to read the rest of the chapters.

So good!

What's with the one page chapters off late?

If you were reading the pdf file which is e book format, they wouldn't seem short. For most of these, there is no reason for them to be longer. I can't drag out dialogue that shouldn't be, because when the characters stop "talking" to me, they do. Writing just to fill pages becomes wordy and unnecessary if there is really nothing else to say. The story is 33 chapters and over 250 word doc pages long..its not short LOL.. The content is there. But I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

When I published a SHORTER version of this (probably a good 40 pages shorter), I was told it was much too long, and had to tear it apart so it was more rushed, especially at the end. That's why now that I have no further intentions of publishing again, I revised it the way I wanted it to be.

The opening chapters were just very long because it was "world building," and mostly internal monologue.

"And, Sam?" I turned back in time to hear her say, "I can see you like to hang to the left, but it's a right to the house."

I spewed coffee all over my shirt and laptop. So witty!

Wait till she meets Max...ooh boy the hijinks. She and Max are birds of a raunchy feather.

I love how fledged out your characters are. Thank you for sharing your gift 💙

I like Ben!!