All Comments on 'Happiest of Endings'

Very good!

Very happy that you resisted the urge to throw the masseuse into a 3-way into this story and just let it be a voyeur/exhibitionist tale. Well written...

The one minor critique I would make is I'm not sure I loved the first person/second person point of view. I found it a little jarring going from "I" to "you" to "she" all the time. It was a little awkward, as if telling the tale to someone who didn't need it told to them because they were there in the first place.

Nevertheless, well thought out and definitely arousing.