All Comments on 'Happiness House'

and i am male .... with a collar

guitars, girls, glorious. Thank-you.

woooo!!! that was brillant!!!

i almost came in my pants... lol

This story is well-written but it feels incomplete, as if there was a lot more that should have been there but wasn't. Also, you were telling the story from Jennifer's viewpoint and you suddenly switched to Melody's and Arleen's viewpoints. In a short story, especially one as short as this, it's best to stick to one character's viewpoint only. I've given you four stars but with a little more effort on your part, it could have been five.

Yup you ruined The love story of melody n Arleen