All Comments on 'Harem Sisters Pt. 10'

Another good and sexy chapter. The end of the part with Liz was good because Jason wanted to spend time with his harem one at the time. To understand them individually, their likes, and get to know them personally. As for the other girls that aren't part of his harem, like Natalie & Abi, will he get to experience them soon? Natalie he did, but what about Abi? Will his harem accept them? As for another girl like Madison, is she still trying to get Jason back? I won't like it as she broke his heart and he already has 5 girls accepting his heart. If Madison tries contacting him again in his phone/e-mail/social media whatever, he needs to let her know it's not happening and she needs to move on. And finally, the mother and possibly the father. Has she told her husband about their children's relationship or is she still keeping herself quiet because of Jason?

So many questions, so many to answer. Take your time on the next part of the story and hopefully anything will be answered.

This has been a great ride, smacks of tales of the "Sewing machine man" in the 60s. You've done a great job with this despite the deluge of sexual behaviour. It's fun and lighthearted, humourous anda little adventurous. See if you can keep it going.

Im glad you reduced usage of "lover" now i can read without being distracted

Also i love how you ended this part cant wait for more

~Darket

I'm loving the story and I can't wait for more. I really hope that some of the girls do willingly get pregnant to him and I'd love to see Abi join their ranks. He and his girls should probably confront his Mother and maybe Melissa together too. Keep up the good work :)

I think the pregnancies l, if any are coming, should be years later and not now when they are young. Maybe add drama to the mix but let it resolve in a nice way. Do not add the mother as you have promised I the first book.

Amazing as usual but now tell us exactly how we should wait for next part cuz your late uploads are always irritates me and coming everyday here to check whether its uploaded or not and then finding out its not uploaded yet makes me to never come here again so exactly tell how long next part will take to being uploaded

And btw story is going really well and you managed everything like a boss so kudos for that

Love Love Love this story! Liz, Tori, Hayley for the win!!

I'm gonna kick my ass to get part 11 finished tomorrow (I'm roughly half way through) and email it off to my proof reader.

I usually give it a couple days with, sometimes he's much quicker but we all have real life.

Then 4 to 7 days for Lit to submit (part 10 only took 3 days)

So as an estimate I'll say part 11 should be up to read around the 10th (currently the 2nd here)

Hopefully it will be up sooner, but that's as realistic a estimate as I can give with all factors involved.

ad the mother and mellissa

switch up with "my lover" it gets tiring to read it as every 3rd or 4th word. say her name or just she. but switch it up.

let him do more oral on the girls you already hinted that he would be interested in that because his ex wasn't. also as payback for all the pleasure and love, they showed him. so sometimes he wouldn't have to actually fuck them just oral sex.

the end was jumpy a bit. can't just all of a sudden mention Abi out of nowhere. you basically didn't mention that name for 3 or more chapters. also Natalie. slowly introduce her again, by randomly let him meet her again. or a text from her. anything other than mentioning her name all of a sudden.

other than that. thoroughly enjoyed it thus far

I want to read more of Lucy though.

The night with Lucy was the most amazing scene.

Good one, but I'm starting to get annoyed with Jason getting into a fight in every episode. 😒

OK. Love the story. Love the characters. Love the somewhat self-deprecating narrator. 5’s all around.

BUT . . .

Were you absent from 6th grade when they taught the difference between the preposition “past” as in “I walked past the bank” and the verb “passed” as in “I passed the math class”?

Lots of other typos, malaprops and misnomers separate your well told stories from amateurism.

beautifully written, great story line and character development. Way to touch on so many different aspects and build a nice multifaceted story.

This is a great story and I love it all. There is one thing that I find mildly irritating. While you call yourself Darth_Aussie your lack of knowledge of Australian idiom gives away the fact that you are American. Aussies call it a rubbish tin, not a trash can. An ass is an animal. A backside is an arse. We don't have buddies and would never refer to any one as buddy. They are mates. In a situation where aggression is required you wouldn't use the term buddy, you would call the other protagonist a cunt. Pal is another term not used by us it would again be mate. A great start and I love the fact that it is based down under. Keep them coming but please learn some of the correct idiom if you want to pass as Aussie

Love it, my only complaint is that every other line seems to be one of the girls biting her lip, every time

Half the time when you are describing the girls, you do so by comparing them to another one of the girls. It kind of comes off as a bit mean? They can be appreciated for what they are, rather than for how they are not someone else.

The first concern of your attention should be learning the proper usage of the English language, then learning definitions of words and how to spell them, after which you need to build a mental thesaurus so you don't continuously use the same repetitious phrasing in every other paragraph. Until then, trying to read what your written is like trying to untangle a word salad.

Great story! Glad to see he finally spent some time alone with Liz. As beautiful as all of the ladies are described, Liz, being the only redhead, would have instantly drawn me to her. I've got a thing for long haired redheads, even more so with green eyes! Drives me wild! Barring the few grammar hiccups, well written, well described story that flows well. 5⭐

After 10 chapters, now you decide to bring Abi back into the story. It’s about bloody time don’t you think better late than never I suppose.. AND Abi will make the sixth like he was thinking about..

Knowing already how it goes towards the later chapters he doesn't need another girl it will cost him

Another great story - next? Thank you.

The altercation in this chapter just came off as forced and a little cringy. Didn't need to be in this at all. Also yet again forgetting anal w/Tori occurred earlier in the series

AAAAAA++++++ Love the story.