All Comments on 'Having Fun with Dycke and Payne Ch. 02'

Nice story, but I wish you would pay more attention to language mechanics. There are quite a few errors which could easily have been caught and corrected by a knowledgeable proof reader. Some people don't care, but I find errors in grammar, punctuation, and such to be real distraction. I think they damage the author's credibility, and detract from the overall quality of the work.

I concur

This was a lovely chapter.

The humor is great. Great characters and how they interact with each other is perfect.

A very sensitive and touching chapter about first love. Another well thought out and written chapter. I look forward to reading the next. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.