All Comments on 'Mine Series: He was Mine First'

. . . all good things cum to those who quit waiting.

(Did I get that right?) :-Þ

I loved the plot of this story. She'd had enough waiting and secretly knew he had too - just needed to do something about it.

I'm ready to read more of what's in your head.

-WI-

WACC story 1 star.

Plot recycled like the other cheating stories-you got no new talent at all

I enjoyed your story and found it refreshing. Thanks for writing and sharing.

Find yourself a good editor and please use spell check on your computer. This was not a bad effort for a first time story and I am sure you will improve with time. I read about half of the story until all the run on sentences, mis-spellings, and grammar errors got the best of me. "New instead on knew, cum instead of come", and other similar errors of word usage got in the way of the story.

Keep up your work but please find yourself a good editor who can catch all these things before you are posted.

We all ignore the more ignorant anonymous fools, They want originality in sex stories and complain that woman in the LW category only have three holes to fuck.

I liked the premeditated aspect of the sex (on her part) as I imagine that a lot of affairs start that way. Of course it is hard to read your own writing for mistakes, but you have so many that it distracted from the story. Sort of like taking out a really nice woman, whose stomach is growling and she's farting loudly. It's distracts you from what you want. Get an editor. You may have to try a couple to get one that you can work with.

Chilley

They intend to be serial cheaters. If they have any respect at all for their spouses, they should get divorced now.

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In ten years from now, life will have them both beat down so much that they won't have the energy to cheat anymore.

He won't be able to get it up and her tits will be hanging to her waist, so as long as they can get away with it they may as well enjoy each other.

Thank you everyone for the feedback! I am looking into getting an editor as it has seriously detracted from this story. I appreciate all the input and I aspire to deliver to you a story free of editing issues in the future. Thank you again!

I hope the nasty witch gets everything she deserves. I won't be reading Pt. 2, but I'm hoping they'll leave their spouses and marry so they can make each other miserable for the rest of their lives. These two idiots deserve one another! It's amazing the garbage they'll put on this site!

but the writing was just so damned bad. The story seemed like it had promise, too. Did you use one of those Dragon things to speak your story into your word pprocessor?

But switch on your spell checker and get yourself an editor.

Let's see what the rest are like.

Incorrect pronouns and other misplaced words can really throw off the flow of a story. Great premise though. Keep writing.

why did you change his name, from dean to sean. was it typo?

What a beautiful story. Can't wait to read more from you.

What a wonderful story! It's so beautiful when two married people find each other for sex! I don't care about grammatical errors or anything like that....the story is what's wonderful! Keep writing, I can't wait to read more! Don't worry about what the negative assholes have to say....they don't have to read it!

Just two worthless cheaters. By the time the novelty wears off, the spouses will have caught them and divorced their asses. Then they will try to be together full time and realize they don’t even like each other much. Stupid people.

What an evil bitch. I hope Dean's wife crazy glues her pussy shut and Dean's dick to his balls.

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dam 2 kinda evil mfers i hope there is some redemtion or logic to this coming, well written fun banter hard to care about either of them thoughand just for me hate the weak willed cheater shares a name lol