All Comments on 'Head Above Water Pt. 05'

Love the story. Absolutely the best. Thank you for completing it.

I have a question.... is Renascence completed? Cause it is fine but I would really like an ending with Grace and Gabe having a future together just like in this story. Also you could also show that Grace mended her relationship with her father.

Every single story makes me cry. You make us feel. We are reborn each time a new chapter is posted which shows us the emotions of people and real life

Never stop writing. Please.

Thank you

Ok, this one caught me off guard. Awesome surprise though :)

First things first: Thank you for carefully planning, writing, and publishing this story! I know I've left a few comments on earlier parts, but this is worth repeating: It's incredibly well written and the chemistriy of Celie and Wes made me laugh out loud more than a few times.

As for this final installment: It's also really, really good, obviously. The things I didn't like I don't think I can turn into constructive critisism - it's all personal preference after all - but wanted to mention anyway. I'm personally a big fan of open endings and find it ... not sure, limiting?, when we get the usual "married, happily ever after and great professional success" trifecta (usually "married, children, great professional success", but the child was an important part of your story from part 1 onwards and so I enjoyed that). The second thing is probably my fault because it's been a while since I read the earlier parts and I didn't have the patience to reread them before the finale. That being said, her not telling him anything, him not even suspecting the pregnancy and her friends just going along with it seemed slightly out of character, and her fall, while very dramatic, did make me go "ok, there's a lot of things going wrong at once right now". I know, life do be like that sometimes, but still: I found it hard to appreciate the dread you were going for in each individual moment because there was always something just around the corner to top it. And that in turn reminded me that we were now narratively doing the usual thing: As difficult a crisis as possible, then the turning point. Which made me feel a little more distance to their suffering than I would have liked.

Could have said that more concisely, probably, but anyway. Again, thank you so much for the story, and I can't wait to see what you're up to next :)

Nora, this is such a beautiful, hopeful, gift of a story. Celine would be appalled at the sentimentality and naked emotion, but this is fantastic.

Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

Hot, fire, flames ... as my daughter would say. Good story!

Awesome. Loved this story and all the ups and downs.

I don't think there are words that would do justice to how fantastic this story is. 5 trillion stars is not enough.

Fan-freakin'-tastic!! I loved the journey.

Great work Miss Nora!

Sc8

Awesome!!!!

You :-)

A wonderful ending to a fantastic story.

I'm glad you finished it! Great story!

Just - incredible. Beautiful. Astounding. I have no adequate words. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Any updates on renascence? If renascence is completed, I can finally be at peace.

Loved the story and the characters. This is an excellent romance. Thank you for sharing it with us.

A beautiful, wonderful, lovely masterpiece. Love it! <3

Gave this a 5 because it doesn’t allow 11s like Spinal Taps amps...it is that good.

Wow. just...wow

Thank you!

So happy to read the final chapter of this series. Once again I got hit right in the feels. Looking forward to whatever is next from you.

norafares can move the hell out of you, can't she?

Is it allergy season already?

Loved the story! You capture the Angst so well! Even though I'm not cursed with that kind of Angst, I know someone who is and you've captured it well. One can only be there for them when it strikes and keep showing the positive and good in the world.

My thanks as well

Fantastic story from start to finish. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Five stars!

I loved it! from beginning to end.

Thank you/ merci/ gracias to the author.

Loved the series, found this final one a bit contrived to pull hearstrings. Why she didn't tell him, the fall, the resolution. Why she could not follow him to Maryland in the first place... etc. After a slowly paced story, maybe too slow in places, the ending felt... rushed and too predictable. Still, a great series with interesting characters. I am sure others will love it. Also: the "you must see an ultrasound" thing also seemed cruel on her friend's part, it reminded me of too many state legislatures trying to force this. Overshadowed the whole thing. Even if Addie meant well and it had a good resolution, that felt like a slap in the face. Finally, I kept thinkin that if she knows birth control might have failed, what about Fetal Alcohol Syndrome? 1st tim was meningitis, but... well, at least she did not keep drinking, presumably...Again, great series.

Liked it, loved it. Keep up the good work!

I just discovered this the day you posted. Had to reread it all because, truthfully, I hadn’t expected past part 2 when I first discovered this series. I am so glad you finished it despite the fact that I’m currently crying! A perfect story, and having lived my entire 30 years in OC (a mile from the block) it was even more surreal to recognize all the places (and the tie ins with the other story, in my bones?)

This story was wonderful, the dialogue and playfulness between the characters was very enjoyable. Please, more like this !

Amazing, the best romance story I’ve read on Lit

Masterful and wonderful, as expected. I was nearly as emotional, reading, as the characters were. Thanks for sharing.

Powerful, touching, makes my eyes leak. Wow.

I sincerely loved it

You’re one the most talented writers I’ve read. The characters are so real you can’t help but empathize with them. You can’t feel their pain and their joy. Thank you so much for what you do.

Scares me I enjoyed this. Must be getting old. Abortion depiction was powerful.

If wives came across with that much sex, there would be a lot fewer divorces. That would be possible. Even easy. Opposite of Nancy. Just say yes. I don’t know a man who could be that romantic. Certainly not for that long.

The best story I've read here so far. I mean this was beautiful and you should get published or something i mean you have serious skills. It was so gripping i was crying and honestly had to stop and console myself cause i dont have a Wes by my side. Anyway keep up the good work and thank you for brightening my day💛

Damn, they just keep getting better!

The elephant in the room may well have been telegraphed at the end of the last chapter but so what, it hasn't spoiled this chapter at all. The writing is still as impressive as before but this time Celine's emotions boiled over and so well recorded. So pleased that you finished it and gave us this amazing story. 5 stars. Thank you.

Simply beautiful. In fact, maybe perfect!!!

Brilliantly written. Thank you

Great story. Thanks 5 ⭐️

What a lovely lovely story and so well written. Your best so far. It’s not often you find yourself completely entrenched in a story, as though you’re the third person watching it evolve in front of you.

Wonderful! I didn’t read it; I lived it! I feel like I know those people. So good. *****+

We in This story tugged at the heart of this old man. In my 70 years I have seen people have the problems. You nailed foster care. Thanks for this moving story..

Excellent. Thank you!

Interesting how both went from not wanting any to on their way to having 2. Charlotte kind of fits her, but not her Hispanic heritage (I'd forgotten about Rita being Hispanic, from ch 4). I did some research and "Bean" would have been far more appropriately named either "Felicidad" or especially "Rocío (would have been the best choice, as it would include both the 'fire' and 'water' of the girl's nature and personality)."

It may surprise you, but I do have a bone to pick with this final installment, as I cannot be 100% sure of the excessive self-doubt and isolation Celine "experienced." I can understand that she was dead-set against a child because the inherent possibility of treating it similarly as she was treated, even if that weren't the intention; I get the "feeling" that since Wes didn't want children (because of his father) that he might have (albeit remotely) reacted aversely to the pregnancy (in her mind only, though). I certainly comprehend her fear and thinking she might have to go it alone for him to have his dream. HOWEVER, that said, the structure of the story and their relationship supported full and open communication they'd established (this point was fully supported by her disclosing her rape by a foster 'father,' something she hadn't even told Rita nor Addie)--something Wes nearly fully ingrained in Celine's head--to say nothing of how he always managed to get her deepest secrets out of her. So for her to suddenly decide it was time to "shut up and go it alone" was out of left field and incongruous with the story development to this point: the story dictated the logical placement for this level of uncertainty to be either in ch 2 or 3 at the latest. It also smacks of the excessive "forced suffering" unnaturally imposed by soap operas (both Mexican and American) on characters since about 1998-present, a phenomenon that exists, although one that has never been reasonably explained as either a plot device or as even a "necessity" to further the story in any meaningful way.

That said, I still enjoyed this final installment--especially with her facing her greatest fear by heading out in the waves--no longer afraid of the water nor of drowning, which also symbolizes her own baptism into a completely new chapter of her life. That also includes Wes's forgiveness of her very selfish decision...in addition to him still being the same witty, quipping 'nerd' she first met over avocados and coffee. It was very touching how you pictured her internal struggle to acceptance of the new life inside her, and how that led to her telling the doctor to stop the abortion.

One more thing: a perfect song (in my opinion) for this story (for chs 4-5) would have certainly been Starship's "Healing Waters."

While I am hoping you'll consider the input I left, you don't have to worry about the score: still a 5.

pretty fucking good...

Congratulations on the award. Well deserved and a LONG time coming, as I was rooting for you to win another far earlier than now. At least your efforts are finally recognized "officially." :)

It was fantastic , It hit the bottom of my soul and then shot me like a rocket into the clouds. Thank you for it. It in some ways mirrored my life with my wife and daughter.

Excellent story - well rounded characters.

I really got to know them and wanted then to succeed in every way... Well done. Well deserved award!

I thought it was outstanding. I did not expected to be pulled into the story line so quickly. I felt every emotion - joy to grief. Thanks for letting it rest so beautifully. Now I need to read parts 1-4!

A true story with a story line ! It has sex but the story is about people and there lives. It was wonderful I would not have expected a story like this on a sex site. It was a pleasure to read .I hope you write many more !!!!

You are a wonderful writer, thank you

KS

A well crafted story. You have the capability to get into your character's heads, which is pleasing.

Love, love, love. I needed this cry to start my day. Thank you. (P.S. I love the wolf story.)

OMG!!! I just finished this story…it’s 4am and now I’m bawling! Great characters, great story, and I’m so happy for Celine and Wes!!

For nearly twenty years now I’ve been reading stories on this site and this would have to be one of the best if not the best Romance story by far. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️. Well done and I’m looking forward to reading many more of your stories…

HOLY SHIT. I bawled my eyes out. Impeccable quality writing and storytelling, along with lovely erotica. Thank you love, I thoroughly enjoyed this. <3

Great story. Good character development.

I used to work in a call center. You nailed it. You either worked in one or do impeccable research. I like your work. I write, and you inspire me to push through my limits.

The way I wept! I've never left a comment on this site before but you are a brilliant writer! Do you have a Patreon?

Nora if you ever make me almost cry again (lol), I will never read one of your stories all in one day ever again. Your oil and water analogy was FANTASTIC dear, yep I am borrowing it. Nora if you start publishing can you send me an email please dear with the titles?

Thank you. That's all I got for ya. We need more #healing stories like this one in this world.

Thanks for making such beautiful stories. I'm pretty sure I've cried during each one. You're an awesome writer :)

Write a book. Please dear God write a book, I'll buy 10 copies. Not even of this story, it's just that your writing is so imersive and I love it that much!

This is my second read of this

series and it touched me even

more than the first.

Nora, once more, merci for the

time and effort you put in these

gems of yours.

A fan.

I'm not going to lie I cried yall, this was amazing. So so sweet, one of the best chemistries and writing I've seen in a while.

This whole story was incredible! I couldn’t stop reading it and loved every aspect of it. 5 stars does not even begin to do it justice. So, so, so we’ll done!

Somehow you’ve dragged me through most of the human emotions in this one story arc @Norafares, it was like watching a dried, desiccated, bitter piece of fruit, become rehydrated, sweet and fragrant and become what it always should have been. The transformation of the Dragon Lady was utterly bewitching, but the writing, grammar and punctuation did not detract one iota from the story, rather, they allowed it to shine as it was meant to. Thank you and your collaborators for a great story, and thank you for posting, cheers, Ppfzz.

Like great sex.....SO GOOD.

Lovely

Excellent.

I've not commented here before but I had to for this one. I should've been asleep hours ago, work tomorrow, or rather later today, will be rough! This was beautiful, thank you. I can't wait to read more from you.

I don't have the words to praise this enough. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. Gold!

You are a hell of a writer, Nora. I enjoyed this story very much.

Brilliant, moving; I haven't shed as many tears for a long time. Only slightly marred by the 'happy ever-after' ending, seemingly an essential part of an American story. Is it a federal law?

I’m crying with joy. This was the most moving story I have ever read! I rarely cry at stories but this one got me. It’s a beautiful story. put all together it could go in a short story collection. Nora’s direct approach to writing makes this east to read. The underlying story of Celine’s change and development was wonderful. Her hardness was overcome by the steady loving presence of Wes. Something I didn’t think would happen. Her pregnancy was foreshadowed well. Fantastic story of love and determination to be successful. Lovely story Nora. Thank you for writing it.

It could be the realist in me that makes me think this story is just OK. The “perfect guy” fairy tale has really warn down on me in literature. Wes is widely handsome, kind, smart, adored, passionate, successful, well-endowed, sensitive & eternally devoted. While Celine is troubled, angry & has low self-esteem. In reality, Celine would have tanked the relationship from the beginning because of her trust issues. She’s someone who needed to be in therapy. Instead, she’s highly successful with subordinates who absolutely adore her despite being the “dragon lady.” Celine had serious childhood drama that could never be erased just because she met Mr. Perfect. It’s both cliche & a bad message. The sex scenes were repetitive but good. Not many women orgasm so intensely EVERY-TIME, Celines orgasms were so intense she would cry. C’mon.

One of the best love stories i have read on Literotica and I have read over 1200 now (jaybee186)

I think I have re read this story 4x now. In my top 5 for sure. (Hoops)

Wonderful!

I really enjoyed the story . In a world driven by hate, politics, coronavirus, racism, on and on, why not allow a story separate you from that. The under water analogy was great. A writer or musician who can through written word or song, can stimulate my emotions.. who has experienced what I experienced and while writing/singing Captures my emotions.. thank you.

I started this story quite some time ago. Part one just grab me with Celine being such a strong woman and knew her job so well. Then this doctor comes along and knocks her off her feet. What a great romance story.

Nora, you writing on this one was great. I tried reading your Void Bunny but I just could not get into it. It was sort of like a RPG which I could never get into either, to complicated to many things to remember. A good old fashioned cinderella story does me good. 5 stars of course

I, too come back to this masterpiece regularly. 90% of the romance vanilla stories bore me to death to be honest. But give me good dialogues and vulnerability plus real gentle souls and I melt. So many good scenes, this could be made into an excellent movie. Rom com or dramedy.

Nora, you are wonder woman with a pen. Your way and craft moves me in a very special way...!

outstanding

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Thank you for sharing this brilliant, beautiful series with us, author! I will forever cherish this beautiful work until the end of times 💘🧸

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

A wonderful soulful story!

I've read the last chapter 3 times and still want to go back because it is so beautiful !

Talk about "MOVIE" material!!! Can you say blockbuster?

Brought tears to my eyes and warmth in my heart. Loved the dialogue.

Big hairy biker sat at bar reading while waiting for the other half. Has coughing fit to hide becoming emotional from friends

I have a reputation to uphold

So in future a warning would be nice.

Excellent, beautiful story and lives

just one word: heartwarming !

This was my second read through this wonderful series. It’s even better the second time than the first. Definitely worth 5 stars.

Words fail me...truly one of the best stories I have ever read . Thank you

A-fucking-mazing. For someone who is supposed to swear like a sailor, she doesn't curse very often... You are some special writer, Nora. You are a gift, and thank you for sharing your gift. You uplift me and encourage me. I feel like a better human being after reading this story. I don't know, I don't have the words. Just a-fucking-mazing. I'm going to savor and treasure this one.

Absolutely magnificent. I said it before and feel compelled to say it again: you are gifted. Thank you so much for sharing your talent.

G

omg. tears several times. horrible and beautiful character evolution.

wow. absolutely incredible piece of writing

Absolutely fantastic story from beginning to end, your writing is art..some people may read it and not understand it, but most will read it and never forget it.

One of my favorite stories I have ever read!

I don’t usually comment, but this is one of my favorites. Well done characters and completely believable

Who could not love this.